Monday, August 13, 2007

Monday Poetry

You greedily sigh
as you slide in beside me
Your fingers trail
down the soft skin of my thigh
Your tongue tastes
the tender curve of my neck
Your limbs caress
mine as you move over me
Your touch excites
me as you slip into my heat
Your gentle stroke
becomes hard, pounding as we lose ourselves
Your body cradles
mine as we lay sated in one another

y, er
I think I need to work on this one a little, it could flow a whole lot better.

15 comments:

Rhian / Crowwoman said...

Very nice and very hot Anne! Welcome back home!

Nancy said...

So hot! I like it and I should not read some of these poems at work. LOL!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Good thing I'm headed to the pool....

Seriously. Yeah, it could use a bit of tinkering, but not much. The structure's SO cool here and I'd hate to see you lose that. And it's tender and hot at the same time; that's an unusual combination. I like it.

Lila Dubois said...

Anne- This is great, and the picture really adds to it, it matches the line about him kissing her neck perfectly!

Sparky Duck said...

No its pretty darn hot. The greedy sigh is the perfect start

gautami tripathy said...

It works! That's what is important.

Robin L. Rotham said...

It's lovely, Anne, and very evocative as it is.

Lisa Andel said...

It worked for me. My IQ definitely dropped while I was reading it. (Only happens with the good stuff).

Stephen said...

Take if from a mlae prospective!
It works just fine ;-}

Jill said...

Not work has to be done!! It's great that way!!

Ann said...

Awesome poem.

Rinda Elliott said...

Whoa. Where's my fan...

julia said...

I'm with Sparky:
"You greedily sigh
as you slide in beside me"
Really great opening!

Emily Veinglory said...

Looks like a good start :)

Anne Douglas said...

Thanks everyone, I wrote it on the fly Monday morning to try get my head back into some hot erotic goodness - then went and sewed ROFL. I think hot erotic goodness and I are just going to have to wait until next week when school is back.